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    Using quotations for emphasis

    My daughter is working on her final draft for the Ant and the Chrysalis. She chose to rework Paraphrase 2. In her revision, she used quotations for emphasis. I'm wondering if she should leave them or rework the sentence to convey the meaning she was intending with the use of the quotation marks. Here is the sentence that contains them:

    Now the "imprisoned" Butterfly flew about free while the prideful Ant sat on a leaf, more pitiable than any butterfly.
    Cheryl, mom to:

    ds 26, graduated
    ds 25, graduated
    dd 11th Grade
    dd 8th Grade
    ds 6th Grade

    #2
    Re: Using quotations for emphasis

    My guess is a rework would be preferable. Perhaps she could call him the formerly imprisioned butterfly? I like her imagery of the reversal of imprisonment and freedom!
    Festina lentē,
    Jessica P

    2021-2022 • 12th year HSing • 10th year MP
    12th • AP Latin online, DE Calculus & Physics, HLN
    10th • HLN, Latin online
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    Me • Third Form for Adults, MPOA; teaching TFL and co-directing @

    Highlands Latin Nashville Cottage School, est. 2016

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      #3
      Re: Using quotations for emphasis

      I am not sure what to do on that. Your daughter has injected sarcasm (seems like?) which shows highly inspired thought, but at the same time, is not formal. I would maybe use that as a teaching moment about the difference between formal, and informal tone in writing. And then probably see how else she could do it, as Jessica suggested. I am no expert, but that is my thought.

      My daughter chose to add that the ant drowned in his pool of tears from his sorrow and shame. Yeah, I have *that* kind of child!

      AMDG,
      Sarah
      2020-2021
      16th Year HSing; 10th Year with MP
      DD, 19, Homeschool grad; college sophomore
      DS, 17
      DD, 15
      DD, 13
      DD, 11
      DD, 9
      DD, 7
      +DS+
      DS, 2

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        #4
        Re: Using quotations for emphasis

        Thank you both! Those were my feelings as well. I discussed it with my daughter and told her that before we changed it I would consult the experts. I was having trouble thinking of something equivalent and think you nailed it Sarah, the sarcasm is making it difficult. We'll have to try to think of a way to try to replicate the sarcasm.

        Sarah - your daughter's ending is hysterical!
        Cheryl, mom to:

        ds 26, graduated
        ds 25, graduated
        dd 11th Grade
        dd 8th Grade
        ds 6th Grade

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          #5
          Re: Using quotations for emphasis

          She reworked the sentence and now it reads:

          Now the previously imprisoned Butterfly flew about free, while the once prideful Ant sat on a leaf, more pitiable than any butterfly.

          She added verbally that two days later he was stepped on, LOL!
          Cheryl, mom to:

          ds 26, graduated
          ds 25, graduated
          dd 11th Grade
          dd 8th Grade
          ds 6th Grade

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            #6
            Re: Using quotations for emphasis

            Sounds like our girls would get along beautifully! Is she a giggler, too?

            AMDG,
            Sarah
            2020-2021
            16th Year HSing; 10th Year with MP
            DD, 19, Homeschool grad; college sophomore
            DS, 17
            DD, 15
            DD, 13
            DD, 11
            DD, 9
            DD, 7
            +DS+
            DS, 2

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              #7
              Re: Using quotations for emphasis

              They probably would! There was much giggling following the ant being stepped on
              Cheryl, mom to:

              ds 26, graduated
              ds 25, graduated
              dd 11th Grade
              dd 8th Grade
              ds 6th Grade

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